This issue follows immediately from the conclusion of the previous one.
THE COMPUTER is both a participant in and the narrator of this issue. When THE COMPUTER is speaking, its caption should have a "blocky" typeface and a squarish speech bubble. There will usually be an obvious point of origin (communicator, REMOTE unit, etc.) for computer speech though in some cases the voice may be "disembodied".
All narration in this issue will also use the "computer" typeface described above. To distinguish between narration and computer speech, narrative captions should be placed OUTSIDE the regular panels, either below or beside the panels they refer to or in a separate "panel" of their own. In the script, narration will be labelled simply CAPTION while computer dialogue will be labelled COMPUTER.
Some captions in the text (notably spells spoken by AVATAR) will be rendered in ATLANTEAN script. A translation will not be provided.
1. CAPTION:
2. CAPTION:
3. CAPTION:
4. CAPTION:
Full-page action panel showing STRIKEFORCE in combat with a small group of American soldiers. The scene is the main gate in the fenced compound we saw at a distance last issue. The soldiers are trying to keep STRIKEFORCE out. To that end, they have parked a couple of Jeeps across the gate and several soldiers are crouching behind them and firing at our heroes.
NIGHTFLYER vaults over one Jeep, kicking out at a pair of soldiers. AVATAR has lifted the other Jeep and is using it to physically drive back a small knot of soldiers (who are diving out of his way). BLACK SWAN (flying) and ELECTRON and SCORPIO (on the ground) fire over the heads of other soldiers, forcing them to dive for cover. BLACK SWAN's beams are of black energy, ELECTRON fires bolts of electricity, and SCORPIO uses his blaster pistol. The REMOTE computer unit flits around the fight (presumably observing and recording).
Bullets whiz all around our heroes but luckily the soldiers have been to the Imperial Stormtroopers' Marksman AcademyTM.
No dialogue.
5. CAPTION:
1. CAPTION:
BLACK SWAN swoops down near SCORPIO.
2. BLACK SWAN:
3. SCORPIO:
BLACK SWAN streaks off towards the main building, cape billowing behind her. We should now clearly see the "antenna": a tubular steel framework in a tetrahedral configuration. Doesn't look anything like any normal antenna, of course. The REMOTE follows her.
No dialogue.
BLACK SWAN hovers over the roof of the building, regarding the antenna. AVATAR flies up behind her. The REMOTE shines a wide beam of light on a part of the antenna.
4. REMOTE:
5. AVATAR:
6. BLACK SWAN:
7. BLACK SWAN:
AVATAR stands on the concrete roof and punches a big hole in it.
8. SFX:
AVATAR gestures at the hole in an "after you" fashion. BLACK SWAN glares at him, hands on hips.
1. BLACK SWAN:
2. AVATAR:
BLACK SWAN drops through AVATAR's hole.
No dialogue.
Back on the ground, ELECTRON and SCORPIO are still laying down blasts of energy. NIGHTFLYER is still kicking soldiers.
3. SCORPIO:
4. NIGHTFLYER:
NIGHTFLYER goes running across the car park. Soldiers fire at him but none come anywhere near.
No dialogue.
1. CAPTION:
NIGHTFLYER has leaped through the air to deliver a flying kick to the building's door -- a very solid-looking security door, which doesn't budge under his assault.
2. NIGHTFLYER:
3. SFX:
4. NIGHTFLYER:
NIGHTFLYER lies flat on his back on the ground, looking up at the door. We can see lines of bullet impacts, marked by little explosions of dust, tracking towards him.
5. NIGHTFLYER:
NIGHTFLYER is rolling to his feet when several bullets very obviously strike his torso.
6. NIGHTFLYER:
He's on his knees, dripping blood, when a bolt of lightning streaks over his head and explodes the door into fragments.
7. SFX:
8. SFX:
ELECTRON dives through the door as bullets smash into the wall all around him. SCORPIO is a few steps behind, pausing to grab NIGHTFLYER. Bullets strike SCORPIO but ricochet off his bullet-proof costume.
No dialogue.
All three of them are inside the building, in a narrow corridor. NIGHTFLYER is on his own feet. His costume is bloodstained but he doesn't seem bothered.
1. ELECTRON:
2. NIGHTFLYER:
3. SCORPIO:
NIGHTFLYER starts down the corridor.
4. NIGHTFLYER:
5. SFX (off-panel):
6. SFX (off-panel):
7. SFX (off-panel):
8. NIGHTFLYER:
All three of them are head down the corridor at a run, NIGHTFLYER in the lead.
No dialogue.
1. CAPTION:
NIGHTFLYER, ELECTRON, and SCORPIO run into a large room where a fight has obviously taken place. Desks and chairs are smashed and a number of armed guards lie motionless on the floor. AVATAR and BLACK SWAN are in the middle of the carnage. Big panel to portray the scene dramatically. BLACK SWAN is hovering a foot off the floor and holding a man by the front of his white lab coat -- consequently, the man is dangling in mid-air, half-choked by his clothing, and looking absolutely terrified.
2. BLACK SWAN:
Close-up on BLACK SWAN and the SCIENTIST as she stares at him menacingly.
3. SCIENTIST:
4. BLACK SWAN:
5. SCIENTIST:
Wider panel to include ELECTRON looking at them.
6. ELECTRON:
Close up on ELECTRON's eyes framed by his blue full-face mask. In his eyes we can see an image of the lab-coat wearer (which readers of HEROES should recognise as our standard representation of psychic powers).
1. BLACK SWAN (off-panel):
2. ELECTRON:
NIGHTFLYER and SCORPIO are by a closed elevator door. The REMOTE hovers nearby.
3. NIGHTFLYER:
4. SCORPIO:
Now AVATAR stands in front of the elevator door. His fingers are digging into the metal.
5. SFX (off-panel):
AVATAR tears the door open!
6. SFX (off-panel):
NIGHTFLYER and SCORPIO peer down the open shaft. AVATAR wipes imaginary dust from his hands.
7. AVATAR:
1. CAPTION:
Still carrying the hapless SCIENTIST, BLACK SWAN dives head-first into the open elevator shaft.
2. BLACK SWAN:
3. SCIENTIST:
A small, sterile-white room. We can see closed elevator doors. Signs on the walls read "BASEMENT LEVEL ZERO" and "RESTRICTED LEVEL". There are flashing red lights on the ceiling. (I'm not sure how you portray a flashing light on a static panel. So just a red light will be sufficient.)
4. DISEMBODIED VOICE:
Same view. The elevator door is quietly disintegrating. We can see a black energy beam shooting through it, to give us a clue who is doing it.
5. DISEMBODIED VOICE:
BLACK SWAN walks through the demolished elevator door, still holding her captive.
6. DISEMBODIED VOICE:
7. BLACK SWAN:
8. SCIENTIST:
BLACK SWAN strides towards a corridor entrance, pushing the man before her.
9. BLACK SWAN:
10. SCIENTIST:
As BLACK SWAN and the SCIENTIST are just inside the corridor, multiple red lasers fire from apertures in the walls and ceiling. Several strike BLACK SWAN but bounce off harmlessly (though they burn holes in her cape). Several strike the man and drill burning holes right through him. He should be quite obviously dead.
1. SCIENTIST:
From a POV in front of BLACK SWAN, we see her slightly surprised expression as she looks at the smoking body in her hands. Behind her, AVATAR, ELECTRON, NIGHTFLYER and SCORPIO are leaving the elevator shaft (NIGHTFLYER swinging out flamboyantly, AVATAR flying and carrying the other two).
2. ELECTRON:
SCORPIO, ELECTRON, and BLACK SWAN are standing face-to-face (doesn't need to be a full-body view, but if it is we will see that BLACK SWAN has dropped the dead man.
3. SCORPIO:
4. BLACK SWAN:
5. ELECTRON:
BLACK SWAN turns away from them, back towards the corridor.
6. SCORPIO:
7. BLACK SWAN:
She strides down the corridor (no more lasers fire). AVATAR is next to her, the other three still back in the room.
8. AVATAR:
9. BLACK SWAN:
10. NIGHTFLYER:
11. NIGHTFLYER (softly):
1. CAPTION:
A view of a gleaming metal door.
No dialogue.
From the same POV -- the door is being torn open from the other side. AVATAR is revealed as doing the tearing, with ELECTRON and BLACK SWAN a little behind him adding their energy blasts to the door's destruction (it's a THICK door!)
2. SFX:
3. AVATAR:
AVATAR is struck in the chest by a crimson energy beam and is staggering back.
4. SFX:
5. AVATAR:
NIGHTFLYER cartwheels past the staggering AVATAR, into the room.
6. NIGHTFLYER:
Full-page splash panel as NIGHTFLYER pulls up short in front of a MACHINE. The underground room is large and high-ceilinged and the MACHINE dominates one half of it (leaving a big floor area in front of it to give space for our heroes to fight in). The MACHINE is big, gleaming, and covered with glowing strips of various colours. Pipes emerge from it and curve gracefully round and back into it. Its design is completely futuristic (or alien) and there is no guessing what it might be doing. There is no sign of where the crimson blast came from.
1. NIGHTFLYER:
1. CAPTION:
SCORPIO enters the room, looking round, blaster held high in front of him, ready to fire. Behind him, we can see AVATAR on his knees, still stunned by the hit he took. ELECTRON and BLACK SWAN are there too, not yet in the room.
2. SCORPIO:
3. NIGHTFLYER:
4. SCORPIO:
5. AVATAR (softly):
6. SCORPIO:
7. BLACK SWAN:
A figure has emerged from around the side of the machine. He is humanoid and clad head-to-foot in a bulky crimson-and-purple suit. A bucket-like helmet is seamlessly joined to the suit. The look is something like the hazardous-environment suits people wear where there are chemical spills of something. Except it's crimson and purple. And what should be the glass faceplate is actually opaque. Oh, and he wears a long purple cape, which makes him look regal in a slightly ludicrous way. We shall call this figure the WARSCOUT. This should be a big panel so we get a good first look at him.
8. WARSCOUT:
The tableau in front of the machine: the WARSCOUT facing off against our heroes; SCORPIO covers him with his blaster; NIGHTFLYER off to one side; BLACK SWAN FLYING, one arm raised as if ready to zap him; ELECTRON and AVATAR further back, AVATAR still on his knees.
1. AVATAR (softly):
2. NIGHTFLYER:
3. SCORPIO:
Close up on the WARSCOUT
4. WARSCOUT:
Wider view to include all of our heroes looking back at the WARSCOUT. Still in a stand-off situation.
5. BLACK SWAN:
6. WARSCOUT:
7. ELECTRON:
8. NIGHTFLYER:
NIGHTFLYER is leaping towards the WARSCOUT, who has raised a hand and is blasting crimson energy from his palm. The beam strikes NIGHTFLYER full-on.
9. SFX:
10. NIGHTFLYER:
1. CAPTION:
NIGHTFLYER is on the floor, stunned. The rest of the team -- except for the hovering BLACK SWAN -- look poised to rush the WARSCOUT.
2. BLACK SWAN:
Close-up on BLACK SWAN.
3. BLACK SWAN:
Close-up on the WARSCOUT.
4. WARSCOUT:
NIGHTFLYER is rising to his feet.
5. NIGHTFLYER:
Back to the WARSCOUT
6. WARSCOUT:
7. BLACK SWAN (off-panel):
8. WARSCOUT:
Close-up on SCORPIO, still holding his blaster with unwavering aim.
1. SCORPIO:
2. BLACK SWAN (off-panel):
3. SCORPIO:
4. BLACK SWAN (off-panel):
SCORPIO, ELECTRON, and BLACK SWAN open up with their various energy blasts. They ignore the WARSCOUT and blast at the machine behind him. But every blast is stopped in mid-air several centimetres short of the machine.
5. NIGHTFLYER:
6. WARSCOUT:
7. ELECTRON (softly):
Close-up on SCORPIO again. He has lowered his weapon.
8. SCORPIO:
BLACK SWAN swoops down towards AVATAR.
9. BLACK SWAN:
1. CAPTION:
She takes a hold of AVATAR's arm.
2. BLACK SWAN:
Same view -- BLACK SWAN and AVATAR have vanished.
3. SFX:
Back on the roof, next to the ANTENNA, BLACK SWAN and AVATAR are in the exact same poses as they held in PANEL 1.
4. SFX:
BLACK SWAN has collapsed to the roof. She waves a hand feebly as AVATAR is moving to help her.
5. AVATAR:
6. BLACK SWAN:
7. AVATAR:
Close up on AVATAR's face as he bares his (many!) teeth in a demonic grin.
8. BLACK SWAN (off-panel):
9. AVATAR:
NIGHTFLYER, ELECTRON and SCORPIO still confront the WARSCOUT. NIGHTFLYER is a little ahead of the other two, closer to the WARSCOUT. All four are looking up at the ceiling.
1. SFX:
2. WARSCOUT:
NIGHTFLYER launches a spinning kick at the WARSCOUT's head, knocking the villain off balance.
3. SFX:
4. NIGHTFLYER:
Close-up on ELECTRON and SCORPIO.
5. ELECTRON:
6. SCORPIO:
7. ELECTRON:
The WARSCOUT is rising to his feet after NIGHTFLYER's last attack, when ELECTRON and SCORPIO open fire. Lightning and blaster fire hit him squarely, knocking him back once more. The WARSCOUT is firing a crimson energy beam from the palm of each hand but he's staggering and firing wildly -- the beams narrowly miss ELECTRON and SCORPIO. (Where they strike the wall, they do enough damage for us to think it's really a good thing they missed our heroes!)
8. SCORPIO:
Close-up on the WARSCOUT, who is down on one knee. He's obviously not as "shielded" as his machine, and he's in bad shape -- there are several holes in his costume through which we can see bare (scorched) metal and smoke pouring from one shoulder joint.
8. WARSCOUT:
10. WARSCOUT:
1. CAPTION:
Full-page panel showing the WARSCOUT on his feet in front of the machine. The others are standing around him, ready to press their attack. But the picture is totally distorted -- stretched, twisted, angles and proportions all wrong, and generally looking like Picasso after a bad trip.
2. WARSCOUT:
1. CAPTION:
SCORPIO and ELECTRON continue to blast (at the off-panel WARSCOUT). But this panel is identical to the previous -- the rules of perspective have gone completely haywire. Consequently, they are firing in random directions, and their blasts even seem to twist and turn in mid-air.
No dialogue.
NIGHTFLYER desperately dodges as ELECTRON's and SCORPIO's blasts (from completely random directions off-panel) come perilously close to him. The panel's perspective is still completely distorted.
2. NIGHTFLYER:
3. NIGHTFLYER:
Close up on the WARSCOUT (still distorted) as he raises both arms towards the ceiling in a "firing" gesture. A red glow is forming around his outstretched hands...
4. WARSCOUT:
...when NIGHTFLYER lands a flying two-footed kick squarely on the WARSCOUT's chest.
5. SFX:
1. CAPTION:
NIGHTFLYER crouches in front of the staggering WARSCOUT, ready to leap again. The panel is still distorted.
2. NIGHTFLYER:
Same view but the distortion effect has gone. The WARSCOUT is now aiming at NIGHTFLYER with both hands.
3. WARSCOUT:
4. SFX:
The dominant panel on the page shows everybody looking up -- at where AVATAR bursts from the ceiling directly above the machine in a rain of concrete.
5. SFX:
1. CAPTION:
AVATAR shows no sign of stopping! He continues his dive from the ceiling and straight into the guts of the machine.
2. SFX:
3. CAPTION:
NIGHTFLYER, SCORPIO and ELECTRON look on in awe.
4. SFX (off-panel):
5. NIGHTFLYER:
6. SFX (off-panel):
7. ELECTRON:
8. SFX (off-panel):
9. CAPTION:
The WARSCOUT looks at the machine, which is now pouring smoke from several tears in the casing.
10. WARSCOUT:
Same view. The WARSCOUT is now fading out of the scene -- his outline wavery and his body translucent.
11. WARSCOUT:
NIGHTFLYER dives through the space where the WARSCOUT was standing -- but all we can now see of the villain is a ghostly outline, and NIGHTFLYER passes through him with no effect.
1. NIGHTFLYER:
AVATAR steps through a hole he has torn in the side of the machine. ELECTRON is helping NIGHTFLYER to his feet. SCORPIO is holstering his blaster. The computer REMOTE hovers around as usual.
2. AVATAR:
3. SCORPIO:
4. REMOTE:
They all look around -- at the walls, floor, ceiling. The world, of course, is very much intact.
No dialogue.
They look back at each other.
5. SCORPIO:
NIGHTFLYER is walking towards the door.
6. NIGHTFLYER:
In space, the shuttle is coasting in towards the Station's docking port.
No dialogue.
Interior of the shuttle, as our heroes are unfastening their seatbelts and moving towards the exit hatch. They all look grim and slightly worried.
1. ELECTRON:
2. BLACK SWAN:
Now they are moving through the airlock and into the Space Station itself.
3. SCORPIO:
4. BLACK SWAN:
The are climbing from the lower level to the command deck.
5. NIGHTFLYER:
6. BLACK SWAN:
They are standing on the command deck.
7. SCORPIO:
8. BLACK SWAN (softly):
9. COMPUTER:
The team looks a lot more relaxed and happy. ELECTRON sinks into a command chair. NIGHTFLYER and AVATAR "high five".
1. ELECTRON:
2. SCORPIO:
3. COMPUTER:
This block of captions shows the computer talking to itself (internally). The captions will be labelled COMPUTER and SUBROUTINE in the script. The SUBROUTINE captions should be portrayed distinctively in the comic, to make it obvious that it's a two-sided conversation -- red text would be a good choice. These captions should be obviously separate from the panel, to show that they are not "spoken" dialogue: the crew doesn't have a clue what is going on.
4. COMPUTER:
5. SUBROUTINE:
6. COMPUTER:
7. SUBROUTINE:
8. COMPUTER:
9. SUBROUTINE:
10. COMPUTER:
11. SUBROUTINE:
Still on the command deck.
12. SCORPIO:
13. COMPUTER:
They look at each other in some alarm.
14. ELECTRON:
15. NIGHTFLYER:
Another separate block of captions to indicate the COMPUTER's internal dialogue.
16. SUBROUTINE:
17. COMPUTER:
18. SUBROUTINE:
19. COMPUTER:
20. SUBROUTINE:
Exterior view of the Station.
1. VOICE (from station):
A separate block of captions again to indicate the COMPUTER's internal dialogue.
2. COMPUTER:
3. SUBROUTINE:
4. COMPUTER:
Same view. The Station just hangs in space, waiting to explode.
No dialogue.
COMPUTER's internal dialogue again.
5. COMPUTER:
6. SUBROUTINE:
Exterior view of the Station.
7. VOICE (from station):
8. COMPUTER (from station):
Back on the control deck. Close-up on the shocked reactions of the crew as they hear the COMPUTER's pronouncement.
9. COMPUTER:
10. COMPUTER:
11. COMPUTER:
© 2007 by David Meadows