This issue takes place a few days after the last. Characters will have changed clothes but there have been no significant changes in their appearances.
The setting is West Texas in early December. Scenery, weather, and clothing should be appropriate.
Most narration in this issue is in the form of WANE's internal first-person monologue (which should be indicated on-panel by a distinctive "hand-writing" lettering). These captions will be marked as such in the script.
Close-up of WANE in the passenger seat of the RV. It's early morning (as we will be able to tell better when we have an outdoor view).
1. CAPTION:
2. CAPTION:
3. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
A wider view includes SARA driving the vehicle.
4. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
5. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
Exterior view of the RV driving down a deserted road in the middle of a desolate part of Texas. Bare rocks, a few scrub bushes, hills in the background. Note that in this view of the RV, and other exterior views when appropriate, we will see FRED's motorcycle on the rack on the back. (We need to establish this because it has not been shown in recent issues that he's still got his motorcycle, and he's going to be using it later this issue.)
6. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
Still in exterior view. But now a police car is following them with lights flashing.
7. SFX:
8. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
The RV has pulled up to the side of the road. The police car has stopped behind them and two officers are walking towards the RV. We don't necessarily see them clearly yet (our POV is probably from behind) but I'll describe them now for future reference. The SHERIFF is in his 40s, tall, lean, blond (though wearing a hat, of course) and weather-beaten. He's always chewing on a tooth pick. He is SHERIFF BOB FRIENDLY. His DEPUTY is a Native American, maybe 10 years younger than the SHERIFF. This is DEPUTY JOE STRAIGHT-ARROW.
9. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
FRIENDLY approaches the driver's door and looks up at SARA. She looks down through the open window.
1. SARA:
2. FRIENDLY:
3. SARA:
4. FRIENDLY:
WANE is now leaning over to see past SARA.
5. SARA:
6. FRIENDLY:
7. SARA:
8. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
9. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
10. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
Close up on FRIENDLY holding up his hand.
11. FRIENDLY:
Wider view to show the side door of the RV in the background. As SARA hands the relevant papers to FRIENDLY, PAUL emerges from the side door.
12. PAUL:
FRIENDLY hands SARA's documents to STRAIGHT-ARROW.
13. FRIENDLY:
PAUL is now standing on the ground and FRED and JAMES crowd the door behind him. All three exchange nervous looks.
No dialogue.
STRAIGHT-ARROW has a hand-held device (PDA) which is he showing to FRIENDLY (he has SARA's ID in his other hand -- we can assume he's been checking it).
1. STRAIGHT-ARROW:
2. FRIENDLY:
FRIENDLY looks back up at SARA, his hand deliberately resting on his (holstered) gun. PAUL steps forwards angrily.
3. FRIENDLY:
4. PAUL:
FRIENDLY turns towards PAUL. In the background SARA climbs out of the RV, watched by STRAIGHT-ARROW.
5. FRIENDLY:
6. PAUL:
7. PAUL:
8. FRIENDLY:
Same POV. In the background, STRAIGHT-ARROW is escorting SARA towards the police car, a heavy hand on her shoulder. She looks back helplessly towards her friends.
9. FRIENDLY:
10. FRIENDLY:
PAUL, JAMES, and FRED watch helplessly as STRAIGHT-ARROW pushes SARA into the back of the police car.
1. PAUL:
2. FRIENDLY:
3. JAMES:
WANE has joined the three on the ground as they watch the police car drive away (in the direction they were previously heading).
4. PAUL:
5. FRED:
6. WANE:
7. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
In the RV, JAMES is in the driver's seat, PAUL next to him, and the other two crowding behind the front seats.
8. JAMES:
9. JAMES:
10. FRED (softly):
The RV drives past a peeling sign which reads: "VALENTINE COUNTY PLEASE DRIVE CAREFULLY". Below that it says: "POPULATION 219". The 219 has been crossed out and replaced by a crudely-painted 217. Which has been crossed out and replaced by 214. Which has been crossed out and replaced by 213.
11. JAMES (from vehicle):
The exterior of the VALENTINE COUNTY SHERIFF'S OFFICE (as we can tell by a painted sign). It's a small, non-descript building, looking just how you would expect a small-town sheriff's office to look. There are two police cars outside. (The RV is also parked outside but does not have to be in the panel.)
1. VOICE (from building):
Interior of the building. It's not a massive office. Two cluttered desks (FRIENDLY sits at one, with STRAIGHT-ARROW at the desk off to one side), seats for visitors, and several filing cabinets. Doors lead to other parts of the building. JAMES, PAUL, FRED, and WANE stand in front of FRIENDLY's desk.
2. FRIENDLY:
3. JAMES:
4. FRIENDLY:
Same scene (but shown from a different POV, for visual variety).
5. PAUL:
6. FRIENDLY:
7. JAMES:
8. FRIENDLY:
FRED lurches forwards and is held back by JAMES and WANE. (We only need to show the three of them in this panel.)
9. FRED:
10. WANE:
11. JAMES:
The four of them are emerging from the building.
12. FRED:
13. JAMES:
Close-up as they pause at the door to the RV.
1. WANE:
2. FRED:
3. PAUL:
4. JAMES:
5. FRED:
Back inside the sheriff's office, FRIENDLY and STRAIGHT-ARROW are still at their desks.
6. CAPTION (voice-over):
7. STRAIGHT-ARROW:
8. FRIENDLY:
9. FRIENDLY:
Close-up on Straight-arrow's troubled face.
10. STRAIGHT-ARROW (softly):
11. FRIENDLY (off-panel):
Close-up on FRIENDLY's hand as he lays his big, heavy revolver on his desk, next to the brass name-plate which reads "SHERIFF BOB FRIENDLY".
12. FRIENDLY:
PAUL and JAMES are in the back of the RV. JAMES reads a newspaper -- we can see the name "THE VALENTINE COUNTY COURIER". PAUL is reading from his laptop.
1. PAUL:
2. JAMES:
PAUL looks over at JAMES, who has lowered the newspaper to look back at him.
3. PAUL:
4. JAMES:
5. JAMES:
FRED is entering through the vehicle's side door.
6. PAUL:
7. FRED:
8. JAMES:
FRED is sitting in a chair and taking out a cigarette.
9. FRED:
10. FRED:
11. FRED:
PAUL is standing and picking up his coat.
12. FRED:
13. PAUL:
The exterior of a small, single-storey family home, apparently some way out of town. The sheriff's car is parked in front.
1. VOICE (from house):
Interior of the house -- a spacious living room, uncluttered by furniture. SHERIFF FRIENDLY talks to another man, DOCTOR REEDE. REEDE is about FRIENDLY's age, good looking but with a perpetual frown, casually dressed. He's handing FRIENDLY what looks like a glass of whisky.
2. REEDE:
3. FRIENDLY:
4. REEDE:
Close-up on REEDE as he pours his own drink from a half-empty whisky bottle. His hands should be portrayed as shaking a little -- probably spilling a bit of the drink.
5. FRIENDLY (off-panel):
6. REEDE:
7. FRIENDLY (off-panel):
The two men face each other again.
8. REEDE:
9. FRIENDLY:
10. VOICE (off-panel):
In a wider view, we see a boy has entered the room. This is PETER REEDE. He's in his mid-to-late teens and has some resemblance to his father. He is in a wheelchair. Both men are looking at him.
11. REEDE:
12. FRIENDLY:
13. REEDE:
PETER has left the room. The two men look at the closed door which he has evidently left through.
1. FRIENDLY:
2. REEDE:
REEDE turns angrily to FRIENDLY.
3. REEDE:
FRIENDLY throws back his drink.
4. FRIENDLY:
FRIENDLY slams his glass down on a table.
5. FRIENDLY:
6. SFX (glass):
FRIENDLY is leaving by the front door. REEDE looks after him.
7. REEDE (softly):
WANE, JAMES, PAUL, and FRED sit at a table in a small bar/restaurant. A waitress (tired-looking woman in her 50s) is putting four plates down. The plates are laden with steaks, eggs, fries, etc.
1. WAITRESS:
2. JAMES:
3. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
4. WAITRESS:
PAUL looks up at the WAITRESS.
5. PAUL:
6. WAITRESS:
Of the four of them, only WANE appears to be ignoring the waitress (he's started on his steak).
7. JAMES:
8. WAITRESS:
9. JAMES:
The waitress walks away.
10. WAITRESS:
Close-up on FRED's eyes, which show the retreating figure of the waitress.
11. WAITRESS (thought):
FRED is standing. WANE has a fork-full of steak half way to his mouth when FRED hauls on his arm, dragging him out of his seat.
1. WANE:
2. FRED:
3. JAMES:
4. FRED:
FRED and WANE are walking down the street. We can probably see more of the town now, in the background. Like the other buildings we've seen so far, the houses are generally old and pretty run-down.
5. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
6. WANE:
7. FRED:
The back of the police station. (The reader won't necessarily know that's what it is, but it will hopefully become obvious from context.) It's a solid wall, no obvious door. There is a small barred window, set slightly above head height. There is nobody in sight.
8. CAPTION (voice-over):
9. CAPTION (voice-over):
Same view. FRED and WANE poke their heads around the corner of the wall.
No dialogue.
FRED and WANE are under the window. They look furtively around.
1. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
2. WANE:
3. FRED:
SARA sits on a bed in a barred cell. Knees are drawn up and head down.
4. FRED (off panel):
Close-up on FRED's face looking in through the barred window.
5. FRED:
6. SARA (off panel):
7. FRED:
8. FRED:
Close-up of WANE, who is crouching with FRED standing on his shoulders.
9. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
Abstract panel of SARA and FRED facing each other. Just head and shoulders in profile on a black background. (This should let us interleave their telepathic dialogue in the space between them.)
1. FRED (thought):
2. SARA (thought):
3. FRED (thought):
4. SARA (thought):
5. FRED (thought):
6. SARA (thought):
The interior of the same cell, but with a different occupant. It's a young woman, about SARA's age but obviously not her (she has short black hair, worn and tattered clothing). She is screaming and struggling as she is being dragged from the cell by FRIENDLY and STRAIGHT-ARROW. The scene takes place at night (it's not important if that isn't obvious in this panel, but it means that there shouldn't be any light from the window).
7. WOMAN (screaming):
Outside the cell, FRED is falling backwards off WANE's shoulders, flailing his arms. WANE hasn't moved and has obviously been taken by surprise by the fall.
8. FRED:
FRED half-sits, half-lies on the ground. WANE is standing.
9. WANE:
10. FRED (thought):
WANE pulls FRED to his feet.
11. FRED:
12. FRED:
13. WANE:
14. FRED:
At the front of the sheriff's office. Only one police car is currently parked there and WANE casually walks down the sidewalk towards it. He will be passing the driver's door and we might see that the window is open.
1. CAPTION (voice-over):
WANE stands by the driver's door and looks around.
2. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
WANE's arm reaches through the open window. We don't need to see exactly what he does.
3. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
WANE saunters casually away from the car. His hands are in his pockets.
4. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
5. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
JAMES and PAUL enter the RV to find FRED and WANE sitting at the back table. FRED is fiddling with a small gadget.
1. PAUL:
2. JAMES:
3. FRED:
4. JAMES:
FRED is walking past JAMES, to the RV's door. WANE is also standing.
5. FRED:
6. FRED:
7. WANE:
8. FRED:
At the door, FRED has turned and is tossing the SatNav device to WANE.
9. FRED:
10. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
11. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
Outside, FRED is on his motorbike and driving away from the RV.
12. VOICE (from RV):
The reception area in an office building. Grey carpets, white walls, regulation potted ferns -- the place just screams bureaucratic efficiency. Two people are standing by an open door. One is STEPHANIE ELLIOT, the Director of the FBI, who readers should recognise from previous issues (most recently ISSUE 37). She has a coat over her business attire and is carrying a briefcase. She shakes hands with a man in the doorway (it's evidently his office and she's just leaving). He is of medium height, comfortably overweight, late 50s, hairline receding rapidly, wearing a dark suit. He is EDWARD MALLARD, as the dialogue will soon reveal to our readers.
In the background of the scene is a receptionist (female) behind a desk, typing at a workstation. Next to her are a number of chairs, presumably for visitors. On one of them sits a man reading a newspaper. Our view of him is blocked by the newspaper.
1. CAPTION:
2. ELLIOT:
3. MALLARD:
Same scene. MALLARD is entering his office and shutting the door behind him. ELLIOT is walking away down a corridor. Neither of them are looking at the seated man who has lowered his newspaper so the reader can see him -- it's DON.
No dialogue.
MALLARD is seated at his desk. It's a very tidy desk -- in fact the entire office is clinically neat and precise. His head is down while he studies some papers. A pen is in his hand.
4. DON (off-panel):
MALLARD looks up. He has an angry scowl.
5. MALLARD:
In a wider view, we see DON on the other side of MALLARD's desk.
6. DON:
7. DON:
Same view.
1. MALLARD:
2. MALLARD:
3. DON:
MALLARD waves a hand dismissively.
4. MALLARD:
5. DON:
Close-up on MALLARD.
6. MALLARD:
7. DON (off-panel):
8. MALLARD:
DON rests his hands on the desk and leans right over to speak close to MALLARD's face.
9. DON:
10. DON:
Same positions. MALLARD has dropped his gaze to look at his desk.
11. MALLARD (softly):
12. DON:
13. MALLARD:
A flashback panel to DON fighting K-MEN in their wolf forms -- a scene from ISSUE 10 would be appropriate. The exact detail isn't important -- it's just to break up the visual monotony of the talking heads. This should be a fairly big panel, to fit in a lot of exposition captions.
1. CAPTION (DON's voice-over):
2. CAPTION (DON's voice-over):
3. CAPTION (DON's voice-over):
4. CAPTION (DON's voice-over):
5. CAPTION (DON's voice-over):
6. DON:
Same view, but now MALLARD looks directly at DON.
7. MALLARD:
Same positions. DON looks blank.
No dialogue.
Same positions, as realisation dawns on DON's face.
8. DON:
DON is paused at the office door.
9. MALLARD (off-panel):
10. DON:
11. MALLARD (off-panel):
FRED is on his bike, halted at the top of a low bank. His helmet is off as he surveys the terrain. The bank is actually the side of a wide, shallow ravine -- perhaps a dried up river. The banks and the floor of the ravine are sandy and strewn with rocks. There is some straggly vegetation but the area is otherwise pretty desolate and forbidding. The bank is not high but it is steep and rocky enough that it doesn't appear possible to get his bike down it. Note that the sun is low on the horizon.
No dialogue.
FRED is walking/sliding down the bank, kicking up a cloud of sand and stones.
No dialogue.
He stands at the bottom of the ravine in front of a large slab of exposed rock sticking out of the bank. The rock is obviously a natural formation and has one roughly flat face, approximately 2m high by 1m wide, at an angle of about 45 degrees. There are rusty iron chains fastened to the rock by big bolts -- one at each of the top corners. The chains end in iron bands which might clamp around... oh... a human wrist, for example. Part of the slab is covered by a dark stain.
No dialogue.
FRED is leaning over the slab and scratching at the dark patch with his pocket knife.
1. FRED:
FRED stands with his back to the slab, looking down the ravine, frowning.
No dialogue.
FRED walks along the ravine, eyes fixed on the ground.
No dialogue.
FRED has dropped to his knees and is scraping at a patch of soil, digging into it with his hands.
No dialogue.
FRED has dug a small hole in the ground to reveal the arm of a buried human corpse. It's virtually a skeleton but with the tattered remains of what may have been skin or clothing still clinging to it. Very gruesome.
No dialogue.
FRED reaches out and touches the arm with a fingertip.
1. DISEMBODIED THOUGHT:
FRED recoils from the arm.
2. FRED:
FRED sits on the ground, arms hugging his drawn-up knees, face bathed in sweat.
1. FRED (softly):
FRED is walking back down the ravine. His phone is at his ear.
2. FRED:
3. FRED:
He is now running. Still talking on the phone.
4. FRED:
5. FRED:
He's scrambling up the bank he climbed down before.
No dialogue.
On his bike, he roars off away from the ravine, wheels kicking up sand and stones.
6. SFX:
JAMES, PAUL, and WANE burst into the sheriff's office. The office is empty. (JAMES is carrying the case which holds his SHIELD).
1. JAMES:
2. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
Now WANE is in the lead as they race into the corridor which leads to the cells. JAMES has the SHIELD in his hand (having dropped the case) and is using his free hand to pull up his cowl to cover his head.
3. CAPTION (WANE's monologue):
The reach the door to SARA's cell -- and it stands open. The cell is deserted.
No dialogue.
WANE stands in the cell doorway, JAMES and PAUL close behind him.
4. WANE:
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